Superb...... Keep it up! - George T. 10/5/05
It is a good poem. - Ayush S 1/13/06
The poet is very good in writing poems as is proved by this poem.
- Aditya Banka 1/19/06
Dasís poem is quite well-written. But even while using blank verse, to maintain a certain amount of rhythm would make poetry more effective. Das should read poems written by poets of the English Romantic and Victorian Age for better grounding. - Vishakha 2/26/06
Very imaginative, Ayush. I love your poem. I took that journey with you.
- Yvonne Branch 9/18/08
Dear Ayush, your poem is a good one for a person who's 11 but I'm sure you can do better, so try to write more. You can also read older poems.
- Mahsa 12/15/08
At your age this poem is great. I go to the beach every week so I share your experience. Continue to write. - Yvonne Branch 1/22/09